Hello everyone. Here is my second video out of the three videos series as the study progresses along.
I apologise for the late upload and I hope to receive useful comments and critiques from everyone.
thank you.
I apologise for the late upload and I hope to receive useful comments and critiques from everyone.
thank you.
Ms Hani here..bravo on uploading your video. Topic chosen is very current and relatable to the young generation. From the previous comments given in your 1st video, it seemed that you took the suggestions given and apply it to your second video.I like that you provide more explanation to make your point more clear.My comments would be to summarise what have been discussed throughout the video before you end. Now that you have a good pace of voice, maybe you can have a more dynamic intonation, and not sounding monotonous or flat. The topic itself is leisure, so it can be presented in an entertaining way. Avoid reading from the screen as eye contact is super important when presenting. So never forget your audience!Body language and hand gestures can be applied more. One more comment I have would be to slow down your pace just a bit..there were parts where your voice was rushed. smile more as you will look more approachable to your audience.All the best for the next vid!
ReplyDeleteHello, Aswaan.
ReplyDeleteActually, you have attempted to highlight a very important issue that needs to be taken into serious attention. The content of your speech can act as a guideline for others to overcome the problem of social media addition, if the have any.
However, for your next video, I would like to suggest that you present your ideas in a lively manner. Don't forget to incorporate non-verbal communication elements as well in your presentation, as these elements can caught the audience's attention to watch your presentation until the end.
Good luck for your third video :-)
Hi! instead of delivering your speech just by sitting down, may be you could move around a bit or show us some examples of the social media pages by using your phone or something like that? it will be much better if you could show some enthusiasm.
ReplyDeleteHi Aaswan!
ReplyDeleteGood attempt for your second video! I can see your effort even though you are not feeling well.
In terms of verbal communication, your voice projection is getting better. It is more audible as compared to the first video-recorded speech. Your articulation and enunciation are okay. However, you may need to improve your speed and intonation while delivering your speech. You seems to be rushed at time. Try to avoid that, maintain your pace and avoid yourself being stuck in a monotone voice during your presentation. Do varies your intonation, ya?
As for the non-verbal communication, your attire projected the professional image of a presenter. Your facial expression is better than before, but you need to show your enthusiasm as a presenter by smiling more. However, please work on your body language, gestures and eye contact. Abstain excessive movements by moving your posture back and fourth. Avoid reading or reciting from your text / screen as it will only impede audiences interest, cause you lack of eye contact and use of gestures.
Content wise, I can see your improvements in the content of your speech as compared to the previous video-recorded speech. You introduce your topic well, organise your ideas using linkers and elaborate your ideas with relevant supporting details. Nevertheless, you need to summarise what you have been presenting before you end your speech.
To summarise, your topic is interesting but it can be presented in a more interesting manner.
All the best, aaswan!
Good day aswan.
ReplyDeleteThe topic and the content of your speech are very interesting, as it is very much relatable with our millennial life. My suggestion - do not keep swaying your body (it is not good, buddy), try to be more confident and relax in your delivery, utilise more gestures (e.g. hand gestures) and eye contact. You can refer to these videos about how to use hand gestures (https://youtu.be/AGyCY6ZDBBk) and eye contact (https://youtu.be/NV3thF7f57A) in a presentation.
Good luck, pal!